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Marilyn Maurer, a secondary language arts consultant
for Niles Community Schools, offers a lesson on teaching
thesis statements in fourth grade...
Main idea, focus, and "big idea" statements are often
confused with thesis statement. A thesis
statement never starts with a question, is focused,
and is arguable. It is used in persuasive essays or
research papers.
Pronouns, which are reserved for personal narratives,
are never used in a thesis statement because they weaken
the position. However, when teaching children to write,
"I believe" can help them get that thesis statement.
Many times they can just take the "I believe" off and
have a perfect thesis statement, as long as it is not
just a statement of fact.
When a paper is focused on fact, the student should use
a main idea, focus, or "big idea" statement. This is
usually done in an essay of explanation, description,
interpretation, or when answering a question.
Main idea, focus statement, and "big idea"
Animals protect themselves in three amazing ways.
The writer would then go on to explain the three ways
animals protect themselves.
Who is Tiger Woods? Tiger is a professional golfer.
The student would then go on to explain more about
Tiger. This is an answer to a question, but it also
could have been a lead for an essay about Tiger. It is
based on fact.
Thesis statements
Many elementary schools are going to a year-round
schedule.
This is not a thesis but a statement of fact.
Revised thesis: Year-round schools can help reduce
overcrowding in classrooms and will benefit students,
parents, and school staff in general. (arguable)
Evidence in Shakespeare's play demonstrates quite
clearly that while Hamlet's madness may seem genuine on
the surface, it was very clearly feigned.
This is weak because of the word "may." "May" leaves
the reader believing that the author of the thesis is
unsure about what he/she is saying.
Better thesis: Evidence in Shakespeare's play
demonstrates quite clearly that while Hamlet's madness
seems genuine on the surface, it was very clearly
feigned. This is definitely arguable as readers
could disagree with this statement. The writer needs to
convince us, and removing "may" makes the argument
stronger.
In their papers, students also need to briefly address
the opposition to their thesis. (This is a high school
skill.)
Penny Brinson, Hawks Rise Elementary Principal
5/03/04
Marcia Freeman
Data
We maintained a 100% of all students (including ESE) making a level 3.0 or above and we went from having 20% scoring at levels 5.0 to 6.0 to 29.5%. Schools are already calling to ask how we did it!
Susie Auten, Michigan program user.
10/8/03
Marcia Freeman
Michigan facilitator
Thank you so much for your prompt response. I will copy your message and give it to my K teachers. We did the viewing of Module 2 today, and everyone has their assignments due in two weeks. Most were very excited about it and are looking forward to consistent training that is monitored!!! (Would you believe THAT?) Thank you again for creating this program......it is really going to bring cohesiveness to our curriculum.
Karen Basil - FL private school
9/29/03
Marcia Freeman
RE: good job
Hi Marcia,
I can't begin to tell you how much I enjoyed being able to shadow you. I learned so much and I feel much more confident in my quest to keep this writing program not only moving along but helping it to continuously gain momentum. Study groups are getting underway. You are the best of the best! It is definitely an honor for me to have you here. Thanks for everything!!!
Kim Eltschlager, Assistant Principal, MI
8/22/03
Marcia Freeman
Aug. 18th In-service Update
Hi Marcia-
This is Kim and Sherry, the early birds at your in-service in Detroit. Just wanted to let you know that our in-service on Thursday went beautifully!!! Thanks to you, of course. Your program is so easy to follow and very practical for classroom teachers. Even those teachers who were a little apprehensive seem to enjoy the morning.
Again, thank you for taking the time on Monday to look at our agenda and thank you for the wonderful presentation. In preparing for our in-service, I have previewed some of your videos several times now and continue to enjoy them and learn something new.
C. Clanton, FL district program user
Friday, 8/01/03
Marcia Freeman
Writing Resource
Dear Marcia,
You have truly blessed the children in our district, not to mention everybody! I am truly convinced that writer's craft is so entirely our next step. Looking forward to keeping you posted.
Carolyn Mohr, OH administrator
3/06/03
Marcia Freeman
Writing Program
Marcy,
Hope this finds you well. I have been so busy I haven't had a chance to write and fill you in on the latest news. Since I presented at the convention, I have had several school systems visit our school. They all are impressed with the writing our children are doing and your program. Perry Meridian, Edinburgh, Sugar Grove and Tippecanoe School Corp. are all interested in purchasing your books and program.
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"It works! Teaching writing as a "craft" using Marcia Freeman's "target skills" approach has helped all our students learn to write and to love writing. After years of struggling with one method after another, we have finally caught on to a winner. In a single year we substantially raised our 4th grade state-writing-assessment average, moving us from last in the county system of 21 schools to tenth. And I know the improvement will continue." — Catherine Kitto, Florida Principal
"Two years ago, 27% of my students scored above the state average on the writing assessment, this year it was 100%, and all because of your workshops." — Cindy Thibodeaux, Louisiana teacher
"The percent of students in our school who meet or exceed our grade-level benchmarks has risen steadily over the two years you have been working with us. That percentage for our third graders has increased almost five-fold from the base year! —Joan Peck, Pennsylvania Principal
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